The big interview about world war 4

The world war four was unexpected. My kids had to be sent away with my wife. I had to fight for England like my dad and grandad.

The first day of war was very scary. Four of our men die and ten of there men die so it was a good day so far. I hope that I don’t die because my family and most of all my kid so am gone are try and live to the day the war ends.I am very concerned about my wife and kids.When our captain came in said that we need to be prepared for tomorrow so we need to have a early sleep.

The battle was bloody with lots of men laying dead on he floor they looked pale and they smelt like fish they laid they like they got ran over.I ran through the crowed people I stabbed someone in the belly it was so nasty slimy I was like I was being stabbed I don’t know how long this war is going to take but I hope it ends soon.

Everyone was back at camp but then something felt wired to me then I notice my friend Jack was not back at camp I told our captain that he is not back he said it’s to dangerous for us to find him now then everyone was eating and getting ready to go sleep.Then we heard someone coming then everyone got out there gun and waited for the person come.The person was jack he was bloody and look that someone just killed him I ask him what happen to him he could not speak he look so disappointed. I could not sleep all I was think about what happen to jack why he was bloody?but I had to sleep.the next morning I ask jack why was he bloody he told me that the french people tried to stab him in the leg to tell us that they want to take over England but jack done the best he can do by running away from them he drop on the floor cutting him self a number of times.They said its a warning to us that they want to take of England again but we ain’t going down that easy but we now I need to keep tougher so they don’t kill us one by one.There was smoke it was disturbing smell i could not take it in there anymore i was getting tired of it i want to quit but i won’t be allowed.


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3 responses to “The big interview about world war 4”

  1. Christopher Waugh Avatar

    You’ve got enough events in this story for a whole novel! I like your ideas and the immediacy of the present tense.

    What I suggest now is to select the first paragraph and break its sentences down – then for every event, add something that describes the atmosphere around it. If you carefully choose a small detail to describe it will often suggest much more about the feelings and the situation.

    It’s going well, we just have to slow down the story and get the sentence structure right.

    Mr Waugh

  2. tyreece Avatar
    tyreece

    Ok thanks for helping me

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